Wednesday, February 27, 2013

55 Fiction - Eyes

Dr. Smita shut the door behind her. The little child was finally relieved from the pain.
Dr. Sushant  was waiting for her at lunch. He complimented her as she sat beside him, “Your eyes are looking so beautiful today”.
The weather always turns pleasant after the rains”, she said with her eyelids bowing down.
Hioy'oy Hoi Polloi


  1. Thoughtful... :) nice one!!

  2. I have nominated you for the liebster :) do check out this link

  3. @ all : Thank-you so much. Fellas! you boost me to write what even I dont know-55 Fiction. :P

    @ odyzz: I'm honoured Odyzz. Hadn't thought of getting this Tag. I'm all elated to get the Liebster. Thanks a zillion :D

  4. oh...raindrops and tears! mmuaaaah.....!:)

  5. aah...tears pouring like little raindrops--mesmerizing little one :)

  6. An evocative tale, told so beautifully in such few words. I could actually imagine two possibilities - the doctor's relief at curing her patient, or the doctor's dejection at having lost her patient. Tears could have come from either turn of chance. I'm going to hope for the optimistic point of view. :)

    (PS: Just read your comment on my post. I'm sorry that your earlier comment got missed somehow. It may have been a submission error. In any case, thank you so much for taking the time to comment again. I really appreciate it :) )

    1. I wrote this with respect to the second situation showing that doctors too feel bad when their patient dies. Many-a-times we think doctors are used to face the deaths but they too are human and it hurts them too when they fail in their duty.
      I appreciate your first idea of taking this 55 at a positive note. In that case we can say Dr. Smita cried 'Merry Tears' on her success.
      Thanks for dropping by. :)

  7. It took me 2 reads before the meaning sunk in (ya, i can be a duffer at times). This one was surely one of your best 55ers. Kudos!
    Rating: 4.2 on 5

    1. Yayayayay =D7
      Thanks a ton for the ratings.
      You aren't duffer :P just the words need to be interpreted and it may take time to understand the author's mind. :)
      Well! You are the 55-king, so learning from you. :)


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