Monday

55 Fiction- Sandal


She was happy to lose the bet. Finally he had bagged the STAR SINGER  trophy. They headed towards the shoe shop after the wait of a long year.

“This..that..ammmm… I cant find it”, she said.

There was no sandal in the shop to cover her hoof flexed back.


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11 comments:

  1. Ritesh Agarwal1:46 AM

    I couldn't understand what happned there...please explain na.... what is a 'roof flexed back' ?

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    1. Surbhi Bafna12:38 PM

      Haha :D :D
      I was pretty sure people wont get through this one :D Yayayaa ;)

      Well!!! I'm a little slow in finding apt words so I put in more of brains to describe "the girl is a ghost with her foot turned back". ( Ulte paer, gotcha!)

      P.S. I didn't know how to descibe this visualization so used "hoof flexed back". If anyone can please help me with a better description then you are welcome :)

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  2. Ritesh Agarwal2:57 PM

    Oh I see. Ya, it's a bit tough to express what you are driving at coz you can't explain it well having just 55 words to play with.

    What you can do at such times is that you put in an 'Author's Note' towards the end where you can explain your idea. I have done that with my stories 'The first prayer of my life' and '48 hours'. You can refer there.

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  3. Easwar Arumugam5:05 PM

    I could now understand the story. Fine.

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    1. Surbhi Bafna10:17 PM

      Didn't you understand it before?? :(
      Please tell me an easy way to frame this idea.

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  4. Rat8:59 PM

    hmm... i thought i was the only one who didn't understand about the hoof flexed back.. :P now i found out am not alone ;-)

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    1. Surbhi Bafna10:21 PM

      You can count me too :P
      I too didn't know this untill I phrased it as 'hoof flexed back' :P :P :P
      Now it's my patent :D

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  5. Unknown10:24 PM

    Thanks for the description....in the comments i was totally out after reading the 55 fiction...i thought whether i am blacked out or my senses aren't working as i couldn't understand a thing...thanks for the description....!!!

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    1. Surbhi Bafna10:37 PM

      Ahh!!! I'm again pleading my dear readers, please please rephrase the whole scene. I would be highly obliged if you can better sum up this 55 fiction. Ideas invited.

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  6. Ritesh Agarwal1:35 AM

    I tried but mujhse nahi ho raha.....your 'hoof flexed back' rocks! You should copyright this term :P :D ;)

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    1. Surbhi Bafna12:57 PM

      Haha :D
      Thanks to my brain for getting a copyright term. :P
      There will be more of the patents in the coming days. :D

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