After seeing around the hustle-bustle his eyes again lingered over the screen. His fingers itched to check for a new message. The love pangs were hitting him hard. The screen hadn’t glowed from past one hour.
Hioy'oy Hoi Polloi
JJJ
Monday
55 Fiction - Power
After seeing around the hustle-bustle his eyes again lingered over the screen. His fingers itched to check for a new message. The love pangs were hitting him hard. The screen hadn’t glowed from past one hour.
Hioy'oy Hoi Polloi
JJJ
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Hmmm...nice....climax is good...but the narration not so engaging. Overall, 3 out of 5.
ReplyDeletePS- Am doing constructive criticism for you. :)
SOb SOb!!! :'(
DeleteKeep criticising and I promise I'll bang this 55 hurdle :D
I'm afraid you will...And I am scared that you may just run me out of business :P
ReplyDeletethe feeling of love is unexplainable and the wait to read just a message is something only a person who is in love can understand...good one...!!!
ReplyDeleteYup!!! totally incomprehensible. Love pangs can be understood by those in love only. For others it's just another bull-shit.
DeleteGood one Surbhi!
ReplyDeleteThe phone always beeps 'Low battery' when we need it the most :D
Yeah!!! I agree.
DeleteWhat should I say, poor we or poor phone or just poor power :P
Pain of waiting and disappointment nicely told. Kudos!
ReplyDeleteThank-you Sir for the appreciation :)
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